My Road Trip(Descriptive Paragraph)
I
can never forget the beautiful and peaceful alley that my grandparents lived in
when I visited them every time in my precious childhood memories.
When
I was little, I loved to visit my grandparents. The village they lived in was
once an old Military dependents’ village and walking through the alley of the
village was very serene and peaceful, different from the noisy traffic of the
city. The village was like a retreat from the turmoil of the world, people
would not even notice as they passed by!
The
mysterious alley and the warming feeling I felt is the main reason why I loved to pass through the alley. As I stepped in, there was uncle Chen’s noodle shop
and it was always full of hungry customers. I could smell the delicious smell of
noodle soup in the air coming out of uncle Chen’s noodle shop and I could never
forget the tasty chewy noodles! As I passed by, I could always see the warming
smile on the neighbor’s faces and chatting with happily when I walked
by their front door. They were warm-hearted and talking to them was so easy
going and relaxed. Every time I met them, the neighbors would greet to me and
asked if I have grown taller. I always giggled and said:
"Yes!" It felt so good to be always welcomed and I love the fact
that the village is full of nice, uniting neighbors who help each other and
living in harmony. More over, my grandma has green finger and she has planted
plenty of beautiful, exuberant plants to decorate the pathway of their front
door. Every time I stepped in the valley, I could always see the lovely and
cheerful green plants greeting to me as I walked by. These are the reason why
passing through the village to my grandparent’s
house is always joyful.
I’m grown up now and I seldom get the
chance to visit my grandparents, they moved out because the government’s
buildings replaced the village. Although the village has gone, the beautiful
scenery, the memories I had with the neighbors, the delicious taste of the
noodle soup is a precious treasure to me that I would never forget.
I recall reading this piece before (assignment 1)
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Good descriptive writing. You recreate the mood of the street well.
You sometimes forget to use pronouns (they, it, etc.)
I think Uncle Chen’s noodle shop is quite unique for the topic “Road Trip.” For most of us, road trip often make us associated nature, but you talk about the warmth of the neighbors instead, and you did well on describing It. That impressive me.
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